Ooh, what a wonderful idea. Linking the love which James and Snape bear towards Lily to the song, Heaven's Light/Hellfire (which is from the Hunchback of Notre dame, right?). It's so clever. It fits the characters, and their relationships so well.
I have never read a story in which it deals with both James and Snape, and is not some washed up love triangle. This actually explores the feelings that they have, without making it a sort of drama in which Lily is some flaky, femme fatal who knowingly plays with their hearts whilst they continually fawn over her. This makes it so much more real, so much more deeper than that. This has a depth that is not easily found. And that you, and I quote, are 'on the fence' is absolutely ridiculous. This is unique, wonderfully written and in my eyes, completely brilliant.
I adore the way that you have written James and Lily into it; her showing a different side of herself and him letting down his guard so in turn, he too reveals a side of him she might not otherwise see. A more vulnerable side, one that is past his usual facade of arrogance and mischief. And the part in which he saw his reflection, and thought it to be a ridiculous joke by her, made me smile. Of course the ending made my poor little shipper heart explode. His description of how her touch affected him, and the sweetness in which she said good night. I am such a sucker for good Lily/James moments.
I've literally just finished the second chapter, and oh my god, it is brilliant. You have written Snape just as well as you have written James, which is rare. It really is. You capture the mind of Snape's longing and add an eerily touch to his hopeless desires. The paragraph, 'It was a traditional fairytale that she wanted, not the Greek tragedy he offered. Even so, she was still his siren, her song echoing within the darkest corners of his mind, lapping his spirit in a fatal lethargy. He would have heeded her call, if only she allowed him to.' is just pure brilliance. I know that I repeat that word a lot (brilliant, brilliance...) - but that doesn't make it any less true. I reckon it makes it even more so, haha.
I'd best stop now. I always go overboard on my reviews, which always casts the impression that I am complete mad and ramble, or am lying, or taking the piss. It's ridiculous because, perhaps besides the first one, it's not true. I know I ramble, but I ramble the truth and I like people to know that what they've written is good, even if it is long-winded and, like I said, a pointless ramble-fest. Just - don't be doubtful about this. It's excellently written, a unique idea and from what I can see - completely without mistakes/grammatical errors.
Author's Response: Oh wow, my immense apologies for not responding earlier to this. I was just so overwhelmed by such an awesome review! Don't worry, rambling reviews are the best kind ;) (to me anyway.) Yup, the songs are from the Hunchback of Notre Dam, one of my favourite movies. When I heard it a year or so back, I knew I had to write James/Lily/Snape based on the song, it's like it was written for them hehe.
I definitely wanted to explore the deeper dynamics with the overlapping relationships, there's alot of material to work with. The best friend who's in love with you turned enemy, the enemy who turns into your boyfriend and eventual husband. JKR has got some wicked sense of drama hehe.
James and Lily constantly bickering then BAM! falling in love, while dramatic, struck me as very tiresome and tedious. I wanted to try a softer, more subtle approach to the relationship. Their one-shot was meant to capture a seemingly quiet moment but one filled with little threads that will eventually form into love. Hehe, thanks for the ego boost :p. I was on the fence because I was aiming for Heaven's Light's writing style to be similar to Hellfire, a poetic narrative or monologue or something rather than what it eventually turned into, a regular-styled story. It has grown on me over time and it does have the right amount of fluff, humour, romance and angst I was hoping to achieve. But I am beyond relieved and happy you enjoyed it so much. Hahaha! The mirror revelation was one of my favourite parts to write. It was so vivid in my mind, I almost half-hope/wish it were canon. You'd have to have a heart of stone not to love James&Lily moments, hehe.
Really? That's so kind of you to say. They are such polar opposites, James and Snape, and yet they still somehow managed to fall for the same girl. Thank you so much for saying I've written both of them well. I actually really loved writing Snape's part, suprisingly enough, though I didn't managed to go as dark as I would have liked to. I wanted to go all-out dark lustful villian mode and it somehow came out slightly sympathetic. Aaah, it's like you're using Legilimency on me or something. That's my absolute favourite part of Snape's story.
Nah, I love this review to bits! Once again, I apologize for my lateness and for not doing this brilliant (:P) review justice. Thank you so much for your praise, it means so much to me!