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Review:Hyenni says:
Hyenni101 here with a review (which is appallingly late! sorry!) :D

grammar: overall, very well done! i didn't spot too many mistakes, but there were a few.
"nostrils flaired" would go to be "nostrils flared", and "He had a reputation to uphold. Not that his reputation could help him now" would work better if you got rid of the full stop in the middle and replaced it with a hyphen :D

characterisation: Draco was nicely done - I thought the opening, inside his head, is very effective in establishing him as a slightly regretful version of the Draco from the books. Obviously, it's very difficult to get canon characters exact, but I think you've done a nice job of it with him :)
Daphne and Astoria have a lovely relationship, and obviously, i can't talk much about character development because it's only the first chapter. Plus, they aren't mentioned much in canon, so it's difficult to judge them :P But i think a little development over the next few chapters will just round them off nicely!

flow: mostly, this was done very nicely. however, the first segment seemed a little rushed - maybe if you dragged out the courtroom scene a tiny bit longer, perhaps mentioning how Draco was taken into custody - what he expects his sentence to be, did anyone try to help him before? - just padding out little details :)
but mostly, very nicely done!

areas of concern: you said everything, and I've covered all the basics, so here I'll just babble :D
I like the plot idea - it's not too unfeasible and if you carry it out well, it should be a good read! you addressed the reason for it being in Korea at the start, but i'm just going to say it's a little random - hopefully you'll cover the reason for them being in Korea later on?

a nice start, congrats! ^^

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