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Review:BrightStar says:
Hi! BrightStar here with your review!

A very well written piece, I'm glad you requested and gave me a chance to read it. Short, precise, well thought out, and very likeable!

Coherence: Spelling and grammar all in order, well done. You asked about flow, no problems there. It all fit in very nicely, nothing out of place. At first I thought it was repetitive, but I don't think that at all now, excellent progression, very suitable style. Quite detached actually, which in another way made me more sympathetic!

Characterization: To be honest, I wasn't sure if there was a flesh and blood character there, but it turned out to be very effective. It was like he was so resigned, he was just a follower and nothing else.

Context: This is always really important for me, even in the fluffy stuff I mostly read and write. You didn't just use Voldemort's rising, you realy got into pureblood societry which was very impressive.

Credibility: This brings me on to my next point. very, very believable. It was like you were saying "this is the way things are", very realistic, not too forced or over dramaticised!

Well done, I'm very impressed with this, especially since it's your first! I hope you write more, and if you do I would honestly love to read it :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I really appreciate it. :)

I'm glad you ended up liking the repetitiveness - I was a bit nervous, because I didn't want to overdo it, but at the same time I wanted it to be present throughout the whole piece. Goyle's definitely just a follower - he's definitely given up a lot, and I actually would love to get to write more about him. :P

Pureblood society I feel had a lot to do with the Death Eaters, because I could see there being pressure to join, especially with the Slytherin families. I'm so glad you found it believable - that was what I was going for! :) Thanks so much for your feedback and your kind words... I really really appreciate it! :D

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