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Review:ravenclaw_princess says:
Hello, ravencalw_princess responding to your request.

I really like the preimse of this story. The thought of having all your powers stripped and living the life of a muggle would be worse than Azkaban for the likes of Draco. The beginning of the story was really good. It cut right to the chase and drew me in completely.

Draco was characterised well. I like how he was so emotionless through it all and being a Malfoy, even though you could sense he was scared. I thought his facade broke at the perfect time when he was truely faced with the consequences.

The story flowed really well and there was a nice use of descriptive terms. I noticed very few grammar or spelling mistakes. There were a few sentence that were a little odd and they are below:

"Astoria raised her eyebrow [at friend] wondering what it was that she wasn't being told"

"We played together [] we were children" = [when]

"Daphne handed her the photo when she pointed [it at]"

Over all, good start. The story is well written with what looks like a very intersting plot.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review and for pointing those things out.

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