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Review:Dalek194 says:
Once again, more good work. You do a good job of Alecto and her hatred of Muggles, and also of Ginny and Neville's early rebellion. I'm glad to see both Ginny back as her usual feisy, fiery self and also the students beginning to fight back.

However, the atmosphere in Hogwarts seems to change very quickly; early on you say that they had "settled happily back into life at Hogwarts", but then mention that the Carrows had threatened the Cruciatus curse. It's all very sudden. Have the Carrows already used Crucio in detentions or are they taking it slowly... for now? And how does this affect the students and teachers?

Also, in the Muggle Studies class, I'm surprised that other Gryffindors didn't stand up to Alecto too; remember that though the Silver trio (as I'm now calling them LOL) are the ringleaders of the DA, Gryffindors are brave by nature and would probably also speak out.

Can't wait to see the DA in action soon, but am worried about Ginny and Neville's detention with Alecto... you always manage to end them with an intriuging sort-of-cliffhanger, so well done! On the whole, another solid chapter, can't wait to read the next one! :-)

Author's Response: Thanks again! I must confess, I actually LOVED writing for Alecto! I think it was quite nice to explore my darker side ;)

The atmosphere I fully appreicte your comments! I have struggled! You can see from the dates on the chapters that there are huge gaps, and I was quite young and naive when I first started writing this story, that's all changed now though, so hopefully you'll find some better consistency as it progresses. The Cruciatus Curse will make an appearance, but not quite yet!

I did debate the Gryffindors reactions. We know they were severly depleted in their numbers, and I kinda felt as though they would be watching their backs so to speak, as they would be the first ones to become a target to the Carrows and Snape.

Ooh! Detention with a Carrow. I love that part of the chapter, a nice twist!

Glad you're still enjoying and still reading away!


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