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Review:Dalek194 says:
Interesting start. It's an interesting idea, Muggles going to Hogwarts, and whenever I've read it in other stories, just like this one, it's always American Muggles. No idea why.

So far it's pretty good - you're writing is clear and easy to read. However, the three girls are very... over the top (high fives, "sweetness", shouting, etc) and a lot is left unexplained (e.g. what about saying goodbye to their families, etc? Surely they can't just disapear for a year with no explanation?). Also, witches and wizards are born, not made; Muggles can't just be given magic, not even by Dumbledore. Still, it's an interesting concept.

Oddly enough, this story is so far very similar to another one I've read (three excitable American muggles come to Hogwarts, both the books and the story are real) except that this one was written a few years earlier than that one. I'm pleased that you didn't go with the whole "here to save the wizarding world" cliche, so good work on that.

On the whole, it's a good start, but you need to add more detail into things that happen - e.g. explaining how both the books and the Harry Potter world can be real. LOL on the Order of the Pheonix quote though... :-D

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