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Review:Dalek194 says:
LOL! Typical Weasley brothers... very funny and well-handled. You got Ginny's anger spot on as well, and on the whole the grammar wasn't too bad in this chapter compared to the other either. However, it still needs some work.

Some spelling mistakes I caught were;

- "bat boogey hex him" (boogey should be bogey)

- "wrap there heads around" (there should be their)

- "answered a quite Mr. Weasley" (quite should be quiet)

- "all the Luna and Dean" (the should be that)

- "to hear the this story" (can use the or this, but not both)

It was very funny, particularly Harry's comeback to being called a loon and the fact that Mr and Mrs Weasley had been listening :-D Also well done for picking Bill and Percy as the ones who flip out the most at Ginny being in the same room as Harry most as they are the two who don't know him as well so would be less trusting than Ron and George, etc. Charlie is quite mature so good work on him being the peacekeeper. LOL with Ron when he comes down!

Overall a good, funny chapter. I look forward to seeing what will happen next... but I'm not sure why Harry would tell the entire teaching staff of Hogwarts, seeing as some of them (e.g Professor Vector) have never even taught him. All the same, more good work - the story is progressing well!

P.S. Thanks for the review on War is Over ;-)

Author's Response: Thanks for the corrections i have to fix those:) I'm glad you liked this chapter it was really fun to write. I didn't mean the whole teaching staff just those teachers Harry new and trusted. Your reveiws are amazing so Thanks!
p.s welcome for the review loved your story


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