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Review:Dalek194 says:
Another great chapter! I like how you have a bit of everything in there - there's a hint of Harry/Ginny, a JK style of writing, a slightly creepy air... that worked really well for this chapter. The start draws in a reader immediately, and is very shocking and creepy, and though the reader always suspects it's a dream, the similarities between how Harry was acting and Voldemort are seriously creepy.

The part where youn say "He, Harry" is very JK, so good work there. I spotted a tiny grammar thing;

- "were seated father down" (father should be further)

Also, maybe the dream sequence could have been separated from the rest of the story with a bigger gap after it finishes (before "Harry sat bolt upright in his bed"). Finally, I think (as Madame Pomfrey says in the Chamber of Secrets that she can fix broken bones in a second) that as it is now the next day, Ginny wouldn't need to wear a cast by now.

But these are only small and insignifiacant things, and the chapter as a whole is excellent. Also, a quick thanks for submitting War is Over's 50th review (sorry, I forgot to mention that in the author's response) and, oddly enough, this review happens to be my 333rd LOL. Statistics galore.

Keep up the good work, I am really enjoying it! This era (just after Order of the Pheonix) is widely covered but so far your story is definately a unique idea that is working well. Great job!

Author's Response: I love your extremely thorough reviews! They make me feel so special!

I love writing my HPFF around the fifth year. I know there's a lot of writing around that time, but the fifth book is my favorite, and I have so many little "what if's" based on that story. My first full length stories, I actually wrote before HBP came out, so they are set in 6th and 7th year. I feel like that is when a lot of other people started writing too.

Oh thanks for finding my errors, too! I don't proof read very well, lol.


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