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Review:bedella says:
and I'm back! Major improvement, dahling. Major Improvement.

In the last chapter, if you couldn't tell, I really didn't like Sandra, even though she was kind of cool. Now she is completely amazing! Rawr. You go, you crazy girl! You tell that boy!

The things I didn't like about this chapter. Lysander. The things I did like about this chapter. Your dialogue. Lysander was such an arse to Sandra; I felt angry just reading about it. There are scumbags in the world who will say anything to lie with a girl (I love you, you are amazing, will you wait for me while I join ...) and if they don't actually love the girl, don't bother. It just. set. me. off. How in the bloody world do you start off at, "I want to join The Preparation" and then go on a bloody tangent about how you hate your girlfriend and her family. I didn't see it happening, obviously. Lysander just seems like such a sweet, loving kid; the son of Luna Lovegood. Thanks for making him a douchebag!

Your strength seems to be writing dialogue, although I won't judge jussttt yet since this is only the second chapter. I felt the scene come alive; much more than the last one, and you should keep up the good work!

What will happen next? Sandra rightfully asks for revenge in my book; if Roxanne and Lysander hook up out of nowhere and flaunt in her flipping face. Can't wait. And I hope Lysander and Sandra don't hook up again :0.

Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad you think it has improved!! *happy dance* Sandreiah definitely has spunk, lol! I wish I had had the courage to flat out smear a sandwich into somebody's hair back when I was in High School, lol! :p

I know you may not have liked Lysander, but in my opinion that is a very good thing - if that makes sense, lol! I was intentionally trying to make the readers hate him, so glad to know it worked so well, haha! Fortunately tho, his twin brother is much more sweet, loyal, and Luna-Like. We don;t know ANYTHING about Rolf, so I just imagined that Lysander would be the one to take more after his dad than his mum...

Yeah, dialogue has pretty much always been my strongest point in writing. It's what I am most comfortable with anyways... Thank you SO MUCH for doing this for me hun, and I really hope you will continue to read the rest of it as well! These reviews were great - by far the most awesome Birthday present I've gotten so far, lol! (I'll bet you didn't even know it was my birthday today, did you?) Haha!! =D

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