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Review:BrightStar says:
Hi, BrightStar with your review!

I was really impressed with this little piece, I love it! One shots are my favourites, little glimpses into people's lives. I've always been curious about Percy, though unable to find ihis voice enough to write him. Also, I much prefer third person, I believe it allows a lot more insight, even with that distance, if that makes sense!

You really engaged with the challenge as far as I can see! I'm trying out this way of reviewing, I've called it the 4C's! Hopefully it'll make these clear.

Coherence: Spelling and grammer all in order; this seems small but it makes a story so much more enjoyable. You asked about flow; I don't think there were any problems there either. Everything followed on logically.

Characterisation: Very well done, I thought this was very percy, despite the fact i sometimes overlook him. really liked "Bugger and damnation" - for some reason I was like "Yes! Percy would say that!".

Context: I honestly believe this is a huge part of any fic, I was really pleased with the way your fic interacted with what was going on in the world at the time - but then that was the whole point of the fic.

Credibility: Very believable, really identified with him. Who wouldn't want to shut their blinds to that? His frustration too with his family - excellent!

Thakns for requesting, I really liked this!

- B x

Author's Response: -blush- Thank you, BrightStar!

I was hesitant at first trying to find Percy's voice, especially in third person. I haven't written a third-person story in quite some time, perhaps years. I've always been more of a friend towards first person as I've grown as a writer.

Ooh, the 4C's! Clever! (Pun not intended!) Thank you for all of your highlights on the 4C's (sounds like a television show! xD) I appreciate all of your wonderful comments and really have no idea how to respond! Haha.

Thanks again!

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