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Review:Dalek194 says:
Not bad - I like the way that you had Harry confiding in McGonagall. Also, unlike many "After the battle" stories, you don't have Harry reconciling with Ginny straight away, in the first chapter, so good decision using it as the base for a sort-of cliffhanger instead.

That said, the punctuation isn't perfect and that has the effect of making some sentences seem too long, which stops the story from flowing. The chapter title could have been more original (then again, it's not part of the story so doesn't really matter) and I recognised elements of other stories in the beginning. That said, stories set after the battle will usually have similar beginnings, as (unless you do something unusual and drastic) there's not much else you can do.

On the whole, though, it looks interesting and there are lots of encouraging signs. Maybe sort the grammar out a bit (it's more lack of commas and capital letters than spelling) but besides from that, a good solid start. I look forward to reading on to see how you build on that.

Author's Response: I know my grammar is horrid i really have to work on it when i get the time
Thanks for the review


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