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Review:Giola says:
Wow.

I really feel for Lisa. Her whole dilemma, valuing her life above others, reminds me of Harry, except he has the opposite issue. He ends his life to save everyone else, whilst Lisa saves herself.

You have me wondering who said 'Friend of yours' at the end. I'm assuming it's just a line you added in, of no real consequence, but something about it rings a bell with me, making me think it was in DH. Or at least it was somewhere that I've read before...gah... (I will now go re-read the end of DH to see if that pops up anywhere...)

I noticed a few typos:
She was scared. She was scared of walking in there and finding all of **her** friends pale-faced, the light in their (you didn't have the 'her')

and

What if they we're **(should be 'were')** going to change the world if they had just lived a day longer?

Thought I might as well point them out :)

Lovely writing on a very minor character, she's hardly ever mentioned and I don't think there's any other stories on the archives from her POV.

The backstory was also nice detail into her.

-Julia

Author's Response: Thank you! I suppose it's sort of the opposite of Harry isn't it?

I'm not sure whether it actually is in DH or whether I picked it up from somewhere else, I suppose it was the first line that popped into my head.

Thank you for pointing those out! I'm sure there are some out there somewhere, but thank you for the lovely review.

x Ely


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