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Review:electricfeel says:
Hi electricfeel here with your review.

Let me just start by saying this is such an original and interesting premise for a story. I find that more and more some writers are beginning to write about the political angle of the wizarding world and I really love that. Furthermore, I really like how you've not only addressed the political wizarding life, but you've approached it from a teenager's point of view.

Speaking of a teenager's point of view, your OC Cassie is very realistic. As someone who works in politics, I know that there is no way your average teenage girl would enjoy any of it. Whilst reading her I had to allow myself a little smile remembering some personal experiences of some politicians' children being thoroughly bored. The fact that I could relate to that shows that you have a very realistic character here, so I applaud that.

The villian of your story, Callum Lester, seems an interesting character. I would be careful that you don't just reproduce Voldemort and the Death Eater's here but it is early days yet for me to be saying that. I can see how it can go in many different ways and I find it really intriguing. And his plan itself is brilliant. I can't wait to see how that works out!

I did notice a few typos here and there. In the first few lines of dialogue I noticed a few commas or full stops were missing which should have come before the closing speech marks. It does seem to only happen at the beginning, after that it doesn't seem to happen again.

Overall, you do have a really promising start here to a story that clearly has a lot of potential. I hope this review was worthwhile and please, feel free to request again :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for you review. I'm really happy you like my OC. I have so much fun writing her and all the different aspects of being the Ministers daughter.

I like Callum. I've never written an evil villain such as him before. His agenda, back story and way of working is completely different to Voldemort, although ultimately, taking control of the Ministry is his ultimate aim.

Thanks again, your review was very worth while


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