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Review:electricfeel says:
Hi electricfeel here with your review.

It's nice when people write about Lucius and Narcissa, it's done pretty rarely so I was quite pleased when I saw that :)

I liked how the emotions in the story switched. The way you've described Narcissa's joy was really endearing and I loved the backstory you've given to their relationship, it helps to develop an understanding for Narcissa. Her tolerance for the way Lucius treats her can obviously be interpreted as love and naivety. Again, you've helped to develop sympathy from the readers for a usually unsympathetic character (Narcissa).

When Narcissa catches Lucius the whole tone of the story changes and I really liked that. The emotions of Narcissa are realistic in that moment when the perfect world she had built became nothing more than a fairy tale. I think her emotions at the end, however, were absolutely perfect. As a reader I can sense the changes in her as a person already, and it would explain how she becomes a little colder later on and already touches on her utter devotion to her child. That part was my favourite :)

The only thing I would say is that it is clear you still have such potential to grow as a writer, and I really mean that in the best way possible. With continuous writing you will only improve and your writing will become more complex. You certainly have a very solid foundation to build upon as your writing is already at a high standard.

Anyways, I enjoyed this, it was an emotional rollercoaster! And please feel free to request again :)

Author's Response: Hi!!

OMG, this totally made my day!! Thanks a ton for this wonderful review! I'm so flattered that you think the story was good and that you found it of a high standard!

I'll keep working on my writing!

Thanks a lot once again!

Cheers!
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