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Review:Akussa says:
Hello once more!

Well this chapter started weird. The first half (and maybe a bit longer) is very spaced out compared to the rest of the story and it really hits you when you read all chapters in a row. That's an easy fix; the problem isn't the dialogue in itself, it's the formating of it.

Other than that, this was a really beautiful ending to cush a romantic story. You closed up the ties of the story together nicely and created some good and believable characters that grew through the chapters.

If I were to recommand you anything it would be to really go back on your entire story and work on the structure and the ponctuation. Like I said before, the idea is good and original and the characters are also very engaging and grow on you but the lack of rythme might throw off some people and they would miss out on your great story.

Akussa

Author's Response: I really can't stop smiling, and I'm almost tearing up :) I have to say ending it was probably the hardest part! it took me ages to come up with something, then, I just had to be like, enough is enough, I'm writing this, and nothing's getting in my way. I ended up absolutely loving it :) I'm so happy you thought it was a beautiful ending! that's what made me smile biggest :D
thank you so much for your advise, that was definitely the best thing you could do for me. Winning wouldn't suck, but I feel like I did anyway :) thanks!


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