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Review:Akussa says:
Hello again!

Like I said, I won't go back on the overall subjects and will talk about this individual chapter.

I liked Angelina's character in this chapter, more than in the last one. In the first one, she felt a bit more superficial and almost emotionless. In this one, more often than not, you dared to write her with more emotion and it was great. I already loved her spark back in chapter one and you explored that in this chapter too while never going over the top or making her sound cliché; it was well balanced.

All in all, and flow problems taken aside, I liked this chapter; you say you had fun writing it and we can feel it when we read. I had a smile on my face too when the chapter ended.


Author's Response: awesome!! I never really took into consideration that if I was really excited about a chapter that it would come through in my writing, but it makes so much sense now :) I'm still pretty new to it, so I'm sooo happy for the feedback :) I really hadn't thought that Angelina in the first chapter sounded superficial, I may want to re read it to see it from the readers point of view. I was just trying to portray how confused she was, and shocked that things were happening so quickly. I'll have to go over it closely. Thank you so much! I'm glad this chapter was more balanced :)

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