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Review:AndrinaBlack says:
I liked that. Sometimes simple can be very beautiful and this definitely had something of that simple beauty. I also like it that it's sad but it's also not sad at the same time, because she is not really bitter or anything.

I think you got Sirius character down well, at least as seen from someone else's eyes. I can imagine that he could sometimes be one of those people who breaks hearts without meaning to and without really noticing he does it.

Just two sentences bothered me a little. To me the end with her telling her name wasn't really needed. Maybe, it's that the "My name is..." has been done a lot, but somehoe it sort of jumped at me at the end and broke the mood a bit. The other one is, "A large part of myself feels sick when I think about it, you." Maybe it's the punctuation and it should be "- you" or something to make more of a pause, but somehow that sentense doesn't seem quite right as it is.

Those are however really small things and overall this was a very enjoyable read, so don't mind the CC too much. :)

Author's Response: Hey Andrina :-)

Thanks so much for coming to review! It's really great to hear that the simplicity still allowed for beauty. I'm also really glad that it comes across as a mix of both sad, but not sad - bittersweet. That made me smile ^.^

Ah, it's really wonderful to be complimented on Sirius and how someone might see him. I agree that he could easily be an unintentional heart-breaker, what with those dashing good-looks... Breaks my heart all the time... ;-)

You know it's the funniest thing with that ending and the name thing! I've got 50% of reviews that love that I mention her name and the other half that feel I should have left it anonymous, and I easily see why the anonymous side feels the way you do, and if this weren't already a podcast, I might even have changed it, haha. I guess I chose to do the name originally because it sort of felt like she was giving one last shot at trying to seperate herself from the other girls by leaving her name behind, but I don't know, it's so all over the place with opinions, haha. Thank you, though! I probably would change it if it weren't a podcast already, to be honest... LOL

And ooo, I never even thought about adding more of a pause there. I definitely see your point and maybe I'll end up going back and tightening that up a bit sometime! Thanks for pointing it out!

Alright, well thank you, Andrina, for the lovely review! I appreciate your input very much, truly. I'm glad to hear you enjoyed it! ^.^

xTanya


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