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Review:Yoshi_Kitten says:
Hello Jayde!! I have a bit of free-time today (finally) and so I've decided to sit down and read a few of your newly edited chapters, haha!! =)

First of all, let me just start by saying WOW!! This was so different, but in a really good way, lol! I mean, it was like reading something out of a different story entirely! You have improved SO MUCH girl, this was amazing!!!I love how much more detail you've included here, and the dialogue flows together so much more smoothly now.

It's the little things; like adding how much the Goblins terrified her, and putting in little details about the wand shopkeeper's squeaky voice and height, that make the story so much more rich. It definitely came across as far more real this time, and Jayde seems a lot more relatable now, that's for sure. Not that this was a bad chapter before, because it wasn't, not by a long shot! But this new version is just amazing!! You've gotten SO much better Jayde, and I am so proud of you hun!! *hugs*

10/10 - because you deserve it after all the hard work you have clearly put into this, haha!! I can't wait to see what all you've added in when she goes to Dunamase too, haha!!

~Deana~

Author's Response: Aww, Deana! *SQUEE!* You're gonna make me cry!! Thank you SO MUCH for reading and reviewing! I'm really, really glad you thought this was an improvement!

I have to give a LOT of credit to my Beta; she's absolutely amazing! *Does happy dance* Yay for the story being more rich and real, and for Jayde being more relatable!!

*Hugs back* You're making me blush! I really almost cried when I saw the last bit, with the 10/10 up there and your explanation. You have NO IDEA how much you really just made my day, dear!! *Super hugs*

THANK YOU SO MUCH!


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