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Review:HorseBabexo says:
Hey, it's me again, lol.
This was cute.

First off, I wanted to say that, like you said, Victoire is a bit full o herself, but then again, most Veelas are, correct? But she is only part Veela, so she, maybe, shouldn't be too full of herself, such as keeping a "controlling" reputation and making herself look like she's perfect.

But I know that she's supposed to be, so I guess it's okay.

BY the way, the scene where Teddy wasn't talking and she started to walk away depressed, couldn't she just wait for him to speak?

Overall, this is very well written except for a couple lines of dialogue were you put the punctuation mark outside of the quotes. Here's an example: "It is pretty safe to assume most of the adults know, Victoire. Harry and Ginny are well aware at this point".
But obviously that was just a typo, so it can be overlooked.

I like how Teddy is a lot like his father was when around his mother.
I also like how he decided to change that, and do what his father didn't have the courage to do.

Overall, this was a great read, and I liked it.

9/10

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks so much!

good point about veela's being full of themselves! i like to keep in mind that shes part veela, but only 1/8th!

I think, at the part you mentioned where she walks away, that victoire walked away because she needs to have the last word if its an argument, part of the control thing. hope that makes sense! :D


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