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Review:Nynfadora says:
So.Not sure if this is you...as in Siriuszilla from twitter, or someone else.but, anyway, I think it is you, and I'm reviewing anyway ;P

Ahhh.just looked at twitter...it is you! ;)

Anyway, I don't think you have to worry about this story at all :) From hows it's going, its great!

I love the way the two brothers interact, and their personalities are already coming through really strong! The description is really good as well; already the reader has a good idea on what Albus looks and what his personality is like :)

To be completly honest ('cause what's the point of lying in a review?) the first few pargraphs don't really flow as well as the rest, so maybe varying your sentence structures might work :)

Your being too hard on yourself, you're a great writer, and everyone finds those first few sentences hard to get into! :D

Author's Response: Yeah, I'm that person on Twitter xD I wish I could actually change my pen-name to Siriuszilla. I use it for everything else. Yeah, I worry a lot actually. I'm a worrier so don't waste your breath, please :) I'm glad you enjoyed it though. Like I said in the review below, it's only an introduction. There'll be loads more to come. Seriously, I hate descriptions and it's all I've been doing for the next chapters!

Yeah, I'm going to edit and try find myself a beta to sort of help make it flow a bit better. Ah, I'm always too hard on myself. It gets me no where though; just makes me stress out even more! Thanks for the review, Jess :)

-Siriius


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