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Review:slytherangoddess says:
You've got an interesting start and I love that you added a lil bro for Draco. That will really make this story yours and not like all the other dramiones out there :D

There are a few nit-picky things that i gotta add cuz of my english background.
1-Sometimes it was a little difficult to decifer who was speaking because you don't have any dialogue tags (Hermione said. or Ginny explained).
2-Another thing is that it seems that time flys so fast while Hermione is at the Burrow. The transitions arent exactly fluent for the reader. One paragraph it's the wedding, the next she's on the train. I was thinking that maybe it would flow together better if you added a bit of description of what's going on or maybe some detail about the wedding.
3-punctuation... theres a lack of it and some of the sentences (expecially Molly's paragraph) are just one large string of words... a few commas and periods go along way :D

Other than that, I'm excited to see where you're gonna take this! You've got a great start :D

~*~Sly~*~

Author's Response: thanks hun! yea i wrote this over a year ago and havent really looked at it since so i knew that there were punctuation mistakes and such. as for the dialogue tags i completely forgot that i hadnt put them in here so i will try to make sure to check it out. i have a (hopefully) new idea as to where i want to take this whole story so that it would be different then other dramione stories. Thank you for reading and reviewing.

~Slytherinchica08~

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