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Review:Aiedail says:
Hi! Your title caught my eye :) I'm a sucker for a good title, although truth be told, I'm not really that hard to hook ;)

It kept hitting me throughout this chapter that the quality of your writing is very refreshing. You have some striking sentences; you manipulate time, sentence structure, and the faculty of thought in simple ways, but I think that it's unique and powerful because of that. I'm not usually draw into sadder stories--if you look at my page you can see that ninety-five percent of my stories list "humor" as one of the genres, because I wimp out a little when it comes to dealing with heavier topics. But your language lightens to load, so to speak, of...whatever it is :P There's something about your language that is light, like it floats. It is simple to read. It is clean, and has a pure feeling to me. I really enjoy this, and commend you for it. It's difficult to achieve style; most writers I believe would try to clutter up their prose (me included! though it's not entirely intentional...), but you strip it down and leave it bare.
A lot like how I imagine Dominique to be feeling. You lead so wonderfully into ideas that you satisfy my curiosity almost before I realise that it's there.
Your varied structure and use of language when coupled with the ideas (although they aren't tied together, I'm finding I'm okay with that) creates something interesting, and something that I hope that you will continue!
The last line of this chapter is also resonant. Something about repetition, when used right.
Lovely story, dear, I look forward to reading more!!
- lily

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your kind words! :) Hehe, the title was from one of my favorite songs ^-^ I really liked the way it sounded so... story title it became!

And thanks so much for the compliments on my writing... you're very kind! I'm really glad it seems to be working. :)


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