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Review:snapecharmer says:
This is a brilliant oneshot, well done!

It was really refreshing to read something which didn't portray Remus as a complete pushover; you made him angry and frustrated as well :)

Aside from the brilliant characterization, I really enjoyed the use of repetition; the use of the 'invisible man.' Your grammar and spelling is beautiful, the only thing I would watch, however, is that you don't 'overthink' Sirius.

What I mean by that is, occasionally I got the feeling that every single thing that Sirius did was described. Sometimes its nice to have a little mystery surrounding the character's thoughts. However this is merely personal preference (and what I think works well for syntax).

Snapecharmer.

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

Yeah, I have a habit of that. o.o I call it ODD - Obsessive Descripive Disorder. :P I am trying to work on it though, I don't know why it's so hard to not write something. Lol.

Anyways, thank you for such a wonderful review!! :) --Jenna


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