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Review:Ronsgirl29 says:
Aw, that was rather sad! Unrequited love always breaks my heart, because there's nothing harder than having feelings for someone who doesn't return them. I want to say I feel bad for her, but you've created a character that I feel bad for but then I also can't help but think she got what she deserved.

I mean, it's sad that he doesn't like her back, but it was wrong of her to try and force him into feeling something by giving him a love potion. She had to have known that would back fire!

Anyway, I liked this story a lot, but I feel like there's more you could add to it to make it even better. There's a lot of things you gloss over, like the nights they spent talking, or the days he was under the potion. Any moments from those times would be great to add, because then we could understand and see why her feelings for him develop instead of just being told that she liked him.

But of course, that's up to you, I just as a reader would be interested to see some of those scenes!

Nice job,
Ronsgirl29 (:

Author's Response: Totally! She did get what she deserved I think, I mean, love potions just aren't worth the consequences :D
Yeah, I've got a lot of comments about the glossing over of the middle. I was trying to do one of those really general but effective stories that you sometimes see, when it's mostly narrative but I'm not sure that it worked out... I may edit this sometime in the future :)
Definitely :D
Thank you for your lovely helpful review!
~NGHL XXX


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