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Review:orderofthephoenix says:
Hey!! You knew I wouldn't be able to resist reading this, didn't you? ^^

Oh my God. This is so beautiful!

I wasn't too impressed at the beginning. To be honest, I thought it was just going to be another one of those first-day-at-Hogwarts type of stories, (Yes, I'm guilty of that too). But you really impressed me. This was like a missing moment from the epilogue of DH! It was that good! Okay, enough of squeeing. Back on track.

I like Victoire a lot. I think she has the potential to have a really interesting character. I understand why you wrote her as you did, though, and to be honest, I didn't think she was as stuck up as I was expecting. Yes, she's a bit too concerned about herself and her appearance to others, but it was subtle. It wasn't shouting out at me, which is good :)

And the kiss... well, that was simply perfect! It was so beautiful and sweet. I love how you integrated parts from the book, such as James finding them & Teddy's power not working for the same reason that Tonks' didn't. That just made it more real.

I only found one mistake: 'They climbed out of the car, stretching them after the journey'. This should be 'They climbed out of the car, stretching themselves after the journey'. Apart from that, spelling & grammar was great! :D

Okay, I'm going to stop now. I loved it, in case you hadn't guessed :P

-Sophia xx

Author's Response: Hiya! Aww I'm smiling like an idiot now, lovely review! hehe I was very clever and knew how to get your attention alright!

Oh i know the stories you mean, and i was scared mine would be like that! what i wanted was a missing moments feel - so glad that came accross!

so glad you liked vic too - i wrote her worse than this originally, in delacour shes a little more spoiled! I find its so hard to get next gen characters right! aww i loved the kiss too, hope i gave it justice! i think its slightly different in the book (barely though, only realised a day or two ago!) but i did want to be faithful! oops sily me, i should edit so!


thanks so much, so happy you loved!!! :D xx


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