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Review:Ronsgirl29 says:
Wow! I loved this. I especially thought the stuff about 'beginning before it really began' was a cool thing you tied in throughout the start of the story. However, one thing I would do though is mabye include some of that begun/beginning thing at the end of the story to kind of tie everything together.

A sentence that didn't really make sense to me was this one, "Imagine, thought Rose, we are two fully grown adults standing in a creek without our toes in the mud" maybe I'm just reading it wrong, but is it supposed to be just 'with our toes in the mud' or something like that?

One of my favorite things in this oneshot was their dialogue. The way they spoke to eachother was so simple, yet everything had a deeper meaning because of the situation they are in. Also I liked how you were able to show that they couldn't really be together without going into details as to why; it left a bigger impact.

Lovely story, I wish I could see what happens to their relationship! sequel? (:

-Ronsgirl29

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I love writing their dialogue because it's really unlike other things I get to write. Thanks so much for the review, and have an awesome day! :D
Annie

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