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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey! This is AditiDraco95 from the forums with the review you asked for!

Well, the plotline and the story was good. Well-written.

I found the ending kind of abrupt, so I suggest you could elaborate on it a bit more, give some more dialogues between Theo and Tracey there and then probably smoothen out things a bit by some more description.

The beginning was really good, and the end would be as good if you could just polish it up a bit more =D

The story is quite realistic and is written a nice, plain and simple way which makes it sweet in its own way. so good job on that =)

Characterization of Tracey was wonderful. It was really very well put. You developed your OC quite well. Though I feel that Theo was a bit lacking in this aspect. You need to brush up a bit more on his characterization. As I said, add in a bit more description here and there, and make it slightly more elaborate, then it would be near-perfect =)

The plot and the flow was overall good too.

Just some minor improvements and finishing touches needed (as I pointed above) and then your story could be up for a 10/10!

For now, I'll award you an 8/10.

Good work though!

Hope I was of help and didn't come off as too harsh!

Thanks for dropping by my review thread!

Cheers!
AD

Author's Response: hey thank you for the really awesome review! I will take all of this into account if i ever do an edit. I'm glad that you liked the begining and my characterization of Tracey. I will work more on developing Theo and the ending! Thank you so much for all of your advice!

~Slytherinchica08~

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