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Review:libby103 says:
Hi!
Oh my Merlin, I am so sorry! This is the review for our review swap from...I think it's more than a week now...sorry!

Oh my gosh. This was definitely gripping. There were tears in my eyes as I read on, but I didn't let them fall because they would interrupt my reading.

Victoire was wonderfully done. Her jealousy of Dominique stands out especially in my mind and I wish you'd followed that up a little. I was confused when I saw she was still at Hogwarts at age 18, but then realized she must've turned 18 somewhere during the school year. I'm still unsure about whether or not she was truly in love with Teddy or Lysander...I think you wanted that impression.

The flashbacks were executed wonderfully. I knew exactly what was the past and what was "present" while the two still were intertwined in a manner that emphasised her distress as she walked down the aisle.

Teddy sort of took a backseat in this fic, but that's alright, because it's supposed to be a story of Victoire and Lysander. When you described his eyes as "nor blue nor grey nor green nor brown," you might want to put that in quotes because it was a bit confusing the first time I saw it.

Lysander was great and very emotional throughout. The scene where Dominique woke up in his bed, snuggling with him, confused me very much and I wish there was some clarification as to what had happened.

The significance of the anemones was great. Some might call it cliched, but I personally love it (I've used the symbolism technique myself.) However, the two meanings of it got me kind of confused later when it wasn't exactly clear which definition she was comparing with her life.

Overall, I loved this story. It was really well written and the concept was great, albeit sad.

from,
Liberty (Libby103)

Author's Response: oh hi!! hehe, i had forgotten you owed me this :) but at least you came up and honoured our swap instead of other people i won't be mentioning :'( happens to me a lot :'(

yay yay yay yay yay yay yay you like it1 thank you thank you thank you so much! The Dominique scene is supposed to be Victoire ;p yeah, i think thats a bit confusing, so i must rewrite that little part. But im so glad you liked all about it! so thanks thanks thanks so much!

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