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Review:Kaida_Snape says:
Alright, I'll tell you straight off the bat that I really liked this story. Not what I was expecting at all. Now, to the nitty gritty stuff.

You might want to consider saying that McGonagall hid the name BEFORE showing Tracey the paper, because I was about ready to go crazy with that until I read the next paragraph. Little details tend to bug me.

Anyways, the talk with Dumbledore, as well as Milicent's outburst, feel a little rushed, as did the confrontation with Milicent, but the confrontation was decent.

Perhaps, in the talk with Theo, you could keep the whole "you just did" sequence, but right after have Tracey pause, think, then glare at him for making her feel foolish or something.

In all honesty, I was not entirely sure about this story when you mentioned it, but once I read it, I really warmed up to it. In fact, I liked it a lot, so it's gonna go into my place of honor (i.e my favorites, hehe). Maybe once the challenge is over you could expand this story because I really liked it.

Kaida_Snape

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so glad you liked it.. It was a little rushed but i needed to get it through my beta and into the que on time to count for the challenge.. i just entered another challenge where i'm going to use these two characters again! I'm so glad you enjoyed it and that you feel it is worthy of your favorites list! You made my day! Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review my oneshot!

~Slytherinchica08~


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