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Review:Amberfire says:
Heh, this was a nice, short piece, I really quite enjoyed it and I must say I would definitely like to hear more about Rose, and about how Hugo managed to get his highly amusing nickname! Watermelon indeed ;)

I quite enjoyed the portrayal of Rose and her family; quite a different slant to what I usually find, but entirely believable, especially with Hermione and the study plan :S

I thought the flashback was a nice way that suited this piece to weave in the history of the couple, rather than having Rose just remembering it. And I must say liked the hyphenations she had, like 'The "Scorpius-Malfoy-has-been-admitted-to-St.-Mungo's-with-third-degree-burns way.' They made me laugh, - though you are missing the end quotation marks at the end of the hyphenation in that one.

The only thing I would say is that I think this could be written as a longer one-shot with Rose not so suddenly agreeing with Scorpius about not having anyone knowing. It just seemed too sudden for me, like it was just finishing for the sake of finishing. I don't know, I felt that 'She was young, had no responsibilities to anyone -why shouldn't she have some fun? What people didn't know couldn't hurt them' sounded a little too blunt; I thought Rose would ponder the idea for a while before reacting.

I did enjoy the last 'Who has to know?' at the end, echoing the song (awesome song) and the title of the piece; a nice touch :)

Personally I was a little dissatisfied with the ending, but overall awesome job, I enjoyed the majority of it!

Amberfire

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! Very happy you liked it! You make a good point about the ending! It is very rushed, but I think Rose would have agreed to anything Scorpius suggested - though she hadnt thought about his option, she was tired of thinking about it generally. But yeah, good point! Thanks again, sorry you didnt like the ending (I might rework it!) and I'm glad you liked overall!

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