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Review:Amberfire says:
wow, this is such a beautiful piece, it feels sort of mysterious, us only knowing part of the story about Rose and Scorpius, and wondering how they came to feel like this. Rose in particular interests me and although I wouldn't want you to add anything in or make this a part of a longer story, because I think it is beautiful how it is, I find myself wanting to know more about Rose.

The first section in particular I loved, because it set the mood for the piece I think, quite melancholic, and quite pensive. Really I loved the feel of the piece, and although I was a little confused sometimes (more through my reading skills, than a fault in your writing I believe) I found that I really liked the way it was told, with repeated questions, and tentative actions. I must say Rose on the bridge reminded me a little of Rose on the titanic when she was about to jump.

All in all I very much liked the pensive feel to the piece and I congratulate you. I think I would use beautiful if I ever had to describe this piece to someone.

I would like to mention that in the first paragraph I think 'All things that begin begin before they've really begun.' should have a comma between the two begins.

There were a few other things that I wondered about, like
'A day filled with lunch in a care' but then again 'the words rolled off her nose sweetly, but coldly' , 'A elementary 'hello,'' and other mentions of elementary caught me off guard before I realised they were remnants from the Sherlock Holmes prank so I wonder if that is too? And also you 'do not own Sherlock Holmes' do you ;)
Lovely prank ;)

Thank you very much for sharing this with us. Though it wasn't like something I would usually read, I think you wrote Rose and Scorpius well and I commend you for that

Amberfire

Author's Response: Hehe, I read over this when it was prank time too and it sure sounded funny! I'm glad you enjoyed reading it and I'm so glad to know that you think this is a ScoRose done well! It certainly wasn't something I would have thought I could have done well, but this piece has become one of my favorites. :)
Annie


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