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Review:LovelyMioneWeasley says:
Lavinia Wainwright—add a period to this little phrase.

That was the only issue I saw!! Hooray and it was a really lovely chapter to read. I have much to comment on because you offered a whole buffet of lovely details and important happenings in your story for this chapter!

The first thing I loved with Finn; how could such a sweet creature live in such an empty and draining place? I really liked the entire exchange between Crane and Freddy; you make Crane so humane and so empathic. His compassion and passion are really lovely to read about even though he still makes me uneasy.

The first scene where the nurse interrupted Freddy and Crane was my favorite bit of the chapter; it was so intense and trancelike. It seemed more like a trance on Freddy’s part then her little trip to the cemetery. Your description of her feeling drunk after the night was an apt description to me!

Lavinia was the one that I thought was going to die; her purpose didn’t seem to be more than be an annoyance and be a painful reminder of mortality. She just seemed too obnoxious and shallow for you to be a character to keep around; you seem to be the type that keeps the deep characters, Lee Anne.

Now to the Lady Shallott reference; I was SO excited when I saw the chapter title because I just knew you were going to include. It’s a long one but in the right mood, it can be a lovely piece of work especially coming from Tennyson. I thought that it fit in well with the chapter and the work in general.

Great job overall, Lee Anne and I love reading your work. Feel free to pop over to my review thread more often because I’m always up for a piece of yours. I always love to see what other historical references or literary references you can throw into your original FF works.

Have a marvelous week!
Lindsey

Author's Response: Hi Lindsey,
Gah! Your reviews are so wonderful. I cannot thank you enough. Your feedback makes me think and I always feel inspired after reading your comments. So again, thank you, thank you, THANK YOU!!! You are an awesome/terrific/fantastic/marvelous reader and I truly appreciate each and every one of your reviews.

Ahem. Now that my gushing is out of the way, let's move on to more...gushing. Hehe. You know how my review replies are by now. ;) I know I tend to ramble.

First off, I'm so glad that you found Crane to be more empathetic in this chapter. I've been trying to make him a bit more human as the story progresses, although to be honest, I think he'll always be a bit creepy.

And yes, Freddy was definitely entranced, though not by any supernatural means. Even though she consistently denies her attraction to Crane, it's certainly there, bubbling just below the surface.

You're right about Lavinia being a rather shallow character. As you said, she served one purpose only, to remind Freddy that the sanatorium is a place of death despite its sometimes benign appearance. I think up until this point, Freddy was able to forget the threat of death in favor of overwhelming boredom and frustration, although Lavinia's passing certainly provided the catalyst to turn her thoughts morbid.

And I'm so pleased you liked the inclusion of "The Lady of Shallott". Have you ever heard Loreena McKennitt's musical version of it? If you're a fan of the poem, you should definitely give it a listen. Loreena is a master when it comes to putting Tennyson's words to music.

All right, I'm going to be extremely repetitive here and say thank you one more time. You really are a brilliant reviewer and I just adore your feedback. ^_^ I hope you have a great week! Take care and be well!

Best,
Lee Anne


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