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Hey there Lee Anne,
I hope this review finds you happy, healthy, and good. Unlike our poor Freddy here. I did particularly enjoy this chapter though!! I hope you gave us some very interesting revelations.
Trelawney is always an interesting character to throw into the mix and I was not disappointed with how you added her to your story. Her dynamic made it very interesting and helped us learn an important detail about Freddy. Her Sight! I was being thrown by that; hadnít seen that twist coming and all the same, I donít find it to be a clichť to give an OC such an interesting twist. Sometimes it can come off that way.
I liked how Trelawney tortured her with just enough information to hook her in but to not divulge all of it. I think it goes to show that she isnít as batty as we all take her for. I applaud you for being so sneaky as to pull that off.
McGonagall is one my favorite characters; her history is one I always enjoy reading about. You didnít disappoint in this aspect either; Iím so curious to read Remusí note as well. I think that the best part of it all was your subtle nods toward McGonagall perks to clue in us in that she is annoyed. It was all well done.
I actually liked that you didnít give us a peek into
Freddy waiting for McGonagall to show; I think it would have messed up your pacing and thrown off the entire flow you had going well for this chapter.
My complaint as always is the length; I wish you would just write an entire novel and I could just read it all in one sitting. I was slammed with the review box before
I was ready for your chapter to be over!! You are so talented in making the reader want to know more and really getting into your story.
My other disappointment was the lack of awkward and slightly creepy Crane. His presence always sets me on end but is tons of fun for me to read. Itís not something you need to add to the chapter; simply a personal preference in creepy characters.
I have no recommendations for this chapter; it serves its purpose greatly by propelling the story forward and letting us back into Potter Universe where Sirius and Remus lie. I think you are an excellent writer and I was thrilled to see your request on my forum.
All the best to you and have a great weekend!
Author's Response: Hello Lindsey,
May Pole dancing? Haha, I have to admit you threw me with that one, if only because one of my other fics, "Willoway" contains numerous references to May Pole dancing. When I saw your mention of it, I wondered just which story you were referring to. However, now I do remember mentioning May Poles in "Breathless". Duh! Hehe.
Wow! I don't even know how to reply to this review. Seriously, I could just gush and gush and gush over your awesome feedback. I just adore your comments and questions and criticisms. After reading through one of your reviews, I always find myself thinking over certain plot points and scenes. Your feedback has really been instrumental in both revising posted chapters and plotting future ones. Needless to say, I feel as though I cannot thank you enough. You've been an unbelievably awesome reader and I truly do appreciate each and every one of your reviews.
Gah! Was that enough gushing? I'm sorry, I can't help myself. Now, onto the rest of my rambling reply.
I'm glad you enjoyed Trelawney's appearance. Often, I think she comes across as an underrated character just because she seems to be a stereotype of herself. But as far as Freddy is concerned, she really does try to mentor the younger woman and give her the necessary push to acknowledge the supposed abilities of her "inner eye". And as far as Freddy's Sight goes, that was established in the prequel to this fic, although Freddy herself still doesn't seem convinced of or even interested in her gift. Not that I can say I blame her, though. After all, things didn't turn out too well for Cassandra. ;)
And I'm really pleased to hear that you enjoyed my take on McGonagall. She happens to be one of my favorite characters as well. Her determination, strength and intellect are truly admirable, which, I suppose, is why Freddy looks up to her as a mentor/mother figure.
And don't worry, Healer Crane will be back in all his creepiness in the next chapter. As it is, he doesn't seem to be able to leave poor Freddy alone for long, haha.
Again, thank you so much for the brilliant review, Lindsey. I cannot possibly express how grateful I am for your feedback and encouragement. Thank you! ^_^ I hope you have a great week. Take care and be well!