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Review:libby103 says:
Hi!

The concept of this story was great, showing the different occurrences when these four first experienced love. The fact that you did not confine yourself to romantic love, but also used familial love in Gabrielle's and Dominique's cases, enhanced the story's charm.

Fleur was in character enough to correlate with canon. I very much enjoyed the descriptions of her times with Bill. The importance of the moment when they showed each other someone from their family's was stressed with your description and really worked in telling the reader that this moment they shared was a hint that they'd be married some day. I particularly enjoyed the fact that Bill used the picture from Egypt.

Gabrielle's character was great. I love the rebellious sort.
"Adele, her friend, introduced her to ballet, an art she had studied before finding out she was a witch." This confused me for a moment, because I always assumed Fleur and Gabrielle grew up knowing they were witches rather than finding out later in their lives. The fact that she left her wand at home confused me as well, but she was only 16 so I guess that can be attributed to magical age restriction in France similar to Britain's. Her distancing herself from her family after Fleur's absence greatly distressed me, but brought me closer to her character as it was so understandable. The way she was reaching for her dreams to become a ballerina showed that she's determined to get there.

Victoire came off as impetuous. Her switches between being happy and angry towards Teddy were a little abrupt. However, her thoughts and fears of his abandonment of her were very spot on on how anyone would feel towards a friend leaving for a different place. Her desire to be like her "Tante Gabrielle" struck me as very sweet, considering she changed Gabrielle's life. Your description of her twirling around like a dancer made me feel as if when she isn't angry and sad, she's very carefree and happy.

Dominique's character was very sweet and innocent, especially when she had a reluctance to say she could keep a secret. I didn't really like the fact that she told Fleur later because I felt like she was giving away that secret she said she would keep. Her attitude in general towards Ginny was cute. When she called the baby in Ginny's stomach "L'enfant nouvelle" I felt like the random bit of French in there disrupted the flow of the writing.

In reflection, "Delacour" is a bit of a misnomer for the name of this story, as Dominique and Victoire are Weasleys, but it doesn't bother me, it's just something that occurred to me now.

Overall, it was a very good story that kept me interested. I'm glad you suggested it in the review swap. The length scared me at first, but the story rushed by very quickly and I hardly noticed the time passing by while reading.

from,
Liberty (libby103)

Author's Response: Great review, thanks! I'm really glad you liked Fleurs part, i was very nervous about that. in regards to Gabrielle, I meant that Adele was muggleborn, I should really clear that up! Thanks for pointing it out! You're totally right about Victoire - I chose to do this because shes young and very spoiled, though overall a good person. in later stories i write her as a little naive or sheltered, though that isnt important here! I'm so glad you liked Dominique. True, she did say she'd keep it a secret, though I imagine by that time Ginny wouldnt have cared, perhaps she's there too but we just dont see her. Good point though! Also a good point on the title, perhaps I should explain that I chose it because, even though the younger two are "weasleys" by name, i think fleur would have been keen for them to identify with the delacours. in addition, i wanted to forge a surface connection between them all. thanks again for this, i hope i answered everything! and sorry about the lenth hehe! So glad we did the swap, this was a really helpful review and I enjoyed your story :D

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