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Review:TallestTower says:
Hey Marina! It's Helena from the forums with your requested review.

Where to start?

The very idea of the two characters lured me in... Daphne/Pansy just seems like such an interesting relationship, and you wrote it excellently.

The way you described their relationship within that first paragraph was brilliant. I think you conveyed a lot of emotion in the first paragraph - that sense of friendship and lust intermixed. I think that the tension progresses throughout, but even in that first sentance there is a sense of disfuctionality (blarrrgh! I cannot phrase my words right!). "Face chiselled from diamonds" was beautiful, it seemed to describe their passionate but cutting characters. I loved "As their hands entwine in a heated moment, their friendship is knotted closer. They are tangled." The imagery is lovely, and it reminds me of later with the words which infest their thoughts from the roots. I thought you explored the relationship in depth, and the phrase about friends as well as lovers seemed very realistic.

I really enjoyed their dialogue too. It seemed so sharp. I really liked this part:

A twisted smile forms on red lips. “Maybe I will.”
“Don’t be cruel.”

I thought the build up to the end was done really well. The imagery was very dark, and you described Daphne's emotions really well... it didn't seem out of character that she would act that way, only inevitable. Definately believable.

The use of repetition really tied the thing together and of course that final image was very powerful.

You asked me if I think it is dark enough and personally I do. The imagery and the build up of tension worked really well. I think that the darker tones of it weren't blatant, but still very effective.

Hope this feedback helped, sorry I haven't really got any critisism! Thanks for requesting :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much, Helena :)

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