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Review:Coley says:
Hi there, Nicole again. :)
You must be sick of seeing my name now :P

I liked how Helena was showing Henry that she was not like every other girl that he had dated, that she wouldn't fall for his charm and grandiose. I also liked that she was able to take him by surprise and that he was outwardly taken aback. Also, it was nice seeing them able to get along and then their guards coming back up as soon as the other let slip.

"Slippery enough to get out of their little clutches as soon as they loosen their grip? Well, I was in Slytherin after all," - You have no idea how much I loved this line, it was awesome.

The only thing I would say was that Helena seemed all too willing to give up a bit too early, it would seem more 'her' to blow him off a bit longer. Although, if this is part of the plot, disregard that previous statement.

"The only women to not address him with a "Lord" before his name were always the women he enjoyed to ensnare the most." - This line was also amazing!

Overall, it was well written, as per usual, very good characterisation and it flowed very well.

Author's Response: Hey Nicole!
I'm definitely not tired of seeing your name :)
You're giving me feedback I desperately need with this story.

Helena is...well, I meant for her to be different. I sort of tried to translate her mother's wit into her personality of pride and the desire for glory. Henry was definitely supposed to be surprised. He's not used to girls like Helena. Their relationship is supposed to be a bit like they'd actually work if they ever got a real chance, but both their personalities make it impossible for both to ever have a relationship with each other or anyone else.

I'm glad you liked those two lines! I'm not entirely sure where they came from, but I suppose that's what being an author is!

Erm, not sure which part Helena gave in too easily, but I know what you're saying as she does give in many times throughout the chapter. It's not a specific plot point, once again, it's just my personal laziness interfering with me creating a few lines in which she holds back longer. I tried, but it didn't sound like it flowed with the story, so I'm hoping I can attribute it to her desire to "play" the "player" and get to Henry-which is a major plot point.

Thank you so much for the lovely review and feedback! I will be contacting you on your review thread once my last chapter is up! (Sorry if that's an annoyance to you)
from,
Liberty


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