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Review:theelderwand says:
Just had to read this tonight. Too intrigued to let it go.

For starters I just have to point out the lines that had me rolling with laughter. Siriusly, I was afraid I'd wake Mrs. Eldy I laughed so loud.

This was great:

"I'll give you the grilling." She grinned at him. "Grilling? Cheese? Get it?"

What can I say, I like cheesey humor (sorry, couldn't help myself)

But this one got me rolling:

"Mum was an Auror, Dad was an academic ... I would have thought that cheesemaker was a natural progression."

Loved the ending - spot on that. Well done.

Alo's fault, eh? Well thats pretty gouda! Sorry, I really shouldn't try to get so Krafty here. But there's really no reason for you to be so Testouri!

I'll stop now.

Great one shot.

Eldy (formerly theEricinowand)

Author's Response: Gotta love the cheesy humour! Though I guess I asked for it by including some in the story itself, hahaha. :)

Anyway, I'm really pleased you liked this. I had 2 ideas that went with Alo's pretext - one was the Greta Catchlove connection, and the other was that line you picked out about cheesemaker being a natural progression - and this was what came of them. I wasn't sure I'd really done the idea justice but it seems to have been received okay so I can't have done too bad a job. In other words, Alo liked it and that was really all I was looking for. :) Then I thought I could link it in with the epilogue with Teddy and Victoire at Platform 9 3/4 and it flowed from there.

Anyway, so pleased you checked it out and enjoyed it. Means it was worth following through! :)

cheers, Mel


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