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Review:Mintleaf says:
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This is just a tiny little thing but I think this 'and purely diamond made tiara'
sounds better as 'and a purely diamond made tiara'. :)Other than that tiny little hiccup, your grammar is just dandy. I do find in some sections that couple of your sentences seem a little stilted but there wasn't enough here yet for me to see whether that was just a teething thing seeing as you said you were just getting back into writing after a hiatus, right?


I normally divide these up into seperate sections but seeing as this is so short I don't feel the need! So, I honestly am filled with intrigue as to what's going to happen and I will definitely keep reading if you keep writing :) Draco and Pansy seem spot on, and I like the situation you've set up so far. All in all, this was really good and my only criticism is that I want to see more! But that's just me being greedy, if this was any longer it wouldn't have had the same kick to it!

Author's Response: ah thanks for that. i'll look into it. yes i'm just now getting back into writing. i find it's kind of hard after not doing it for so long. i'm working on the first chapter and i plan to make it longer. i'm no good with super long chapters but hopefully i can get them atleast to 2,000 words xD thanks for your review dear.

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