That was hilarious, and quite adorable. Teddy's a cute kid. (And I can say that now, because we're relatively the same age. That makes me feel really old for some reason...)
Correct me if I'm wrong, but isn't this Greta from HTM? One of the gigglers or something. Idk, I might be wrong.
Anyway, once again you've done a fantastic job of characterization in an incredibly short time. Their personalities came out with just a few lines of dialouge. And I'll prove it.
1. Andromeda is strict woman, but she's softened a lot after the war's over and having a grandson like Teddy has improved her sense of humor. She feels the loss of her daughter and son-in-law keenly and regrets that she didn't get to know him well and that neither of them got to know their son. Teddy is the reason she continues to get up every morning. She loves him more than life itself and wants to do what's best for him but reluctantly admits to herself that he's going to have to figure things out on his own.
2. Teddy has a lovely sense of humor and enjoys the occasional prank but is more of an observer than an active participant. He's good-humored and easily amused. He's got an easy smile and takes everything in turn. Teddy doesn't like sitting still for long periods of time and becomes bored when life gets too predictable.
3. Greta Catchlove is hardworking and to the point. She doesn't believe in sugar coating or beating around the bush. She likes cleanliness, punctuality, and a sense of adventure. Greta has an easy laugh and fetish for puns. She's incredibly cheesy. (Hardi-har-har. You're HILARIOUS Mel. xP)
4. Victorie is a strong personality. She knows what she wants and she challenges anyone to deny it to her. She enjoys a good laugh but as a whole takes life a lot more serious than Teddy. Vic is the jealous sort, though she's in denial. She's extremely uncomfortable about allowing the world to have Teddy for a whole year while she's still stuck in school--but she's bearing with it. Victorie feels stifled in her house and can't wait to leave and live with Teddy, but she understands that its a good sort of smothering. Vic wants to give Teddy the family that he never had and she has no doubt that he'll make an excellent husband and father, though she's fully aware that it's a touchy subject and knows better than to talk about it out loud to anyone other than her best friend (whoever that may be). She hopes that everyone who works at the cheese factory is as old and fat as Gerta/Greta.
Am I wrong?
Author's Response: Aw, Brook, you're making me blush! What an awesome review! I shall attempt to do it justice.
First of all, yes Greta is in HTM. She's a canon character, either a Wizard of the Month on JKR's website or on a Famous Wizards Card, I forget which, but she was born in 1960 (same year as Lily, James and Remus) and wrote a book called Charm Your Own Cheese under the name Gerta Curd. So you'll find her in some canon-based Marauder fics, if the author has done their homework. Of course, when Alopex gave me the plot bunny she was too perfect a character NOT to use, so I used her. :)
As for my characterisation, well I had NO idea you could get that much from the little tidbits I showed in the text. However, you are pretty much spot on for what I was thinking about their characters. The "what's life without a little risk" line is based on something Sirius said in the books, but I figured that Remus as a fellow Marauder would have a similar attitude - at times - that would be passed onto his son. And yeah, Vic's not thrilled with being separated from Teddy for a whole year and certainly hopes that everyone else at the cheese factory is old and fat; Andromeda definitely regrets not getting to know her son-in-law better and is trying to be all things for Teddy; and Greta tells it like it is but loves the occasional pun. You put it much better than I did but I'm wary of using up my character count, so we'll just agree that you did a brilliant job of summing it all up.
Anyway I'm really glad you liked this little story, it was a bit of a random idea but once Alo planted the seed I couldn't NOT use it, if that makes any sense. :)
thanks again, Mel