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Review:adluvshp says:
hey there!

This is AditiDraco95 from the Forums with the review you requested.

Firstly, I apologize for the long wait I put you through!

And Secondly, I am glad you found my review on "You're Not Sorry." helpful =)

Now, coming to the story,

it is a well-written one-shot, with the right touch of "drama", some fluff and "lightness". Since it is written as a humorous fic, the "big" issues not being highlighted is not a major factor here.

The fic was good all in all. but since its a one-shot I think it lacked some kind of insight into Rose and Scopius' relationship. Had it been a longer fic, you would have covered that up in upcoming chps, but one of the major points to be taken care of while writing a one shot, is to ensure that there's a proper intro and a proper conclusion (which was both there in your fic... congrats for that :D)...and also a proper insight into the characters. Your fic, being centered around Rose and Scorpius' relationship, needs a bit more insight into the relation. Two or three more flashes, maybe of them getting together in the first place, or some memorable moment they shared, or how they share each others' thoughts, or the understanding between them, anything would do the trick. It would involve the reader a bit more into the fic.
Apart from that, the grammar, characterization, flow and writing structure, all was upto the mark, so great job!

Hope I was of help!!

8.5/10

Cheers!!
AD

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for that! Again, a very helpful review. Some great points, hopefully I'll fill them in in future rose/scor fics! Thanks again for doing this, no worries about the wait!
-B x


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