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Review:Timechild says:
Still a good job. A point or two

1. "He pulled out his wand to unlock the door when a man of red hair came racing up behind him." You're talking about Rose here. You need to change man to girl or young woman. Having Rose skip a year in Potions is a nice touch.

2. The tattoo. It is not in cannon, so an explanation of how it got there might be good. Why did Draco recognize it? When has he seen it before? Nice description of the tattoo though.

I am looking forward to reading about the "talk" Hermione is requesting after the tattoo incident. I trust it will be quite interesting.

Mind you, these are just a thought or two for you to consider (except the man reference that needs to be changed). They are just suggestions to improve the chapter.

Overall, good job as usual. Keep it up. I like this story enough to put it in my favorites. I look forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response: Haha thanks for pointing that typo out.
It was supposed to be "a mane of bright red hair"
Ive fixed it, they just gotta validate the changes.
im glad youre enjoying the story so far.

:)
AG


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