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Review:Mintleaf says:
And chapter two... :)

Grammar/Readability:
'Athena rapped sharply on the bars of the towering wrought-iron gate in front of her with her wand, and almost instantly the cool voice of Rhiannon Avitus-Rutherford issued forth.' I think this sounds much, much better as two shorter sentences!


Characterization:
I love her mother! She's so delightful haha!

Nathaniel also sounds hilarious. She he says 'Scandal!' I actually laughed, and I'm not sure why...


Plot/Flow:
I don't really have much to say here. The plot is really still in it's budding stages so it's a bit tricky to say too much! That being said, I do think the first two chapters were very engaging and interesting and on the right track. These reviews are a bit short, I apologise, but you've really got nothing to change; this is all very well formed :)

Author's Response: Hmm, an interesting point. I'll have a look at that :)
I'm glad you like some of the minor characters. I'm a fan of Nathaniel, he was originally based on a friend of mine, but he's developed a mind of his own :P
Once again, thanks so much for the reviews, they've made my day :)


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