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Review:Aderyn says:
Hello! Here for your review!

I quite enjoyed this story. I really like the concept and the parallel parts. I also liked that you didn't always discuss romantic love, which was nice. You also gave each Delacour (or Weasley, for Victoire and Dominique) an individual voice, which I think worked well.

I saw two errors in spelling and such. First, when Fleur says "moment when love first touched me" line, she says "loved" instead of "love." Also there was one sentence that didn't make much sense to me, I don't know if you left off a word, or what, but I was confused: "She stopped by the café whose coffee she deemed good enough to drink her and bring to Bill"

Overall, I really enjoyed how these stories flowed together and were interconnected. They also seemed to be the right length, not too short, but not too drawn out either.

Oh, and your French seems to be in order as well.

Bravo!

Author's Response: Hey! I'm really glad you liked this! Youre right, it does need to be edited, I sent in the non - beta'd draft! Thanks for picking up on it.

So glad they flowed and it didnt seem to long! So happy the french worked!

Thanks!!
- B x


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