-glomps and refuses to let go- Aghhh!!! You updated; I must say that the amount of excitement I felt when I saw it. And Misty, you did not disappoint me.
I must say that I am the biggest fan of your chapter lengths; you give us readers some real meat and some real substance to your characters, to your storyline. And your storyline is getting very, very good my love.
I mean, pregnancy/! No real test-- you are so brilliant and original. First off, we aren't sure who the father is which is a bit Mama Mia but really, when you get down to it, I think you made it really original. You made it three believable guys and I gotta applaude you for having some guts to give credit and make Peter actually popular.
And then to add the fact that Vivian wasn't interested in seeing if she was actually pregnant, you took a really
fresh and intresting perspective. I'm so, SO, SO glad you made it a possibility that she isn't really pregnant. However, it does clearly communicate a believable level of lack of responsibility and youth.
My favorite, FAVORITE part was the bit with the painting; I loved that you included it and I loved that you had the portraitsengaged in conversation with Dollie and Vivian.
I also loved the food fight; it was Maraduers and so lovely and such a perfect way to break up all the tension that you had built into the chapter. I like the little breathers that authors can give because a story gets tiring and exhausting when you just slam drama after drama after issue after issue into a plot.
The subtle inclusions of Remus' jealousy were heartbreaking but definitely worthy of keeping in there. I really liked that you won't let the reader forget any part or get too attached to Dollie/whoever. As soon as I am convinced that Remus is the only fit for her, you throw in some seriously wonderful Sirius/Dollie.
And the inclusion of the Maraduer bit was good as well. Oh, this chapter was just perfect, Mist. I didn't find any typos and it didn't lag a bit for me. Well done ^_^
Author's Response: I did! I have no idea where all this inspiration and plot bunnies are coming from but I'm grateful for them nevertheless. ^_^
Oh, it's wonderful you said that you liked the length. I can't tell you how many times I read over this chapter trying to shorten it to a more reasonable length but there was just so much plot that I wanted to keep that I finally just posted it regardless. Thanks so much for your encouraging words, dearest.
Oh gosh, I didn't see the Mamma Mia resemblance til you pointed it out! I was torn between making it one person, two or three then I figured that three people were more dramatic. It was meant to convey Vivian's lack of responsibility and forethought. Interesting that you mentioned that section, didn't you catch your little shout-out ;).
Fifteen year-olds usually aren't the brightest bulbs, as much as they pretend to be ;). Not an insult, I know from experience. Vivian definitely thinks she knows best and doesn't need some silly test to prove otherwise. Too much pride and much too stubborn, Vivian shows her Gryffindor colours.
Hehehe, that was me injecting a bit of Hogwarts life and humor into a drama-filled section. I'm so happy you liked it so much =D.
One can always count on the Marauders for a good time. This would be the second disruption they've orchestrated (the other being the James-in-a-tutu incident). It was what you described it as but it also served its prupose as a plot mover.
Hehehe, that was Remus moving on to the next stage of his love for Dollie. First was guilt, then denial, then depression and now, jealousy. Personally, I was getting bored of mopey Remus so here's me trying out jealous Remus for size. For now, it's quite a nice fit. Hope you think so too =). Hehe, I quite like juggling Dollie between Remus and Sirius. That is the fun of a love triangle, figuring out who she's ultimately meant to be with. I do have an endgame in mind but for now, I'm all for readers shipping her with one or the other.
Thank you so much, Linds! Your reviews are ones I always look forward to every time I post a new chapter and means so much that you enjoy them.