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Review:Mintleaf says:
Hello! Mintleaf with your review. :)

Grammar/Readability:
'I had is hair.' His hair?

Besides that little error and a few more itty bitty ones you're all on track!


Characterization:
The letter seems a little bizarre. It doesn't seem like Dumbledore would have written like that! But also, why would she have turned down the position?

I liked the 'Hassan Mostafa' reference, it was subtle but good!


Plot/Flow:
To be honest, I was a little cautious when reading this. Religion isn't generally a topic that crops up in the world of hpff, and I was hoping it wouldn't be too... 'in your face' (for lack of a better phrase).

That being said, a couple of passages did make me just a touch uncomfortable, but hear me out about it!!! So, I really like all your characters and like everyone else has said it's a really original idea... but, I personally feel like you aired out some beliefs a little too much. I just don't want the religious aspect to outweight the story aspect. I mean, of course it is part of the character but at the moment it almost seems like that is ALL Hiba has to offer as a character. I hope she becomes more of a person whose religion is PART of herself but not ALL of it. (I hope you don't take offence to this, I really didn't mean it in that way!)

Anyway, I'll keep reading because I want to see where the plot actually goes! :)

Author's Response: Hey,thanks for the review.
Yeah I guess I need to re-write Dumbledore's letter, when I re-read it wasn't very Dumbledore-like.
Hmm, yeah I understand about the religion thing, but I'm not really going to focus on the religion aspect in this story only. Her beliefs would be vital for the plot later on, and that's why I had to point out some of her beliefs. And I understand what you mean, but her religion sort of shapes her character, and that's why it's different for her than other characters, if you know what I mean. ^^


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