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Review:ciararose says:
Hello dear!

First of all, great job with this challenge! You definitely fulfilled the requirement wonderfully. The story is very suspenseful in the way it unfolds, and leaves the reader really wondering what happened to her, but at the same time, it is clear that the focus is more on the lack of accountability and the lack of attention that is paid to her than what actually happened.

I think your description is really well done here. The image you present is chilling, and I really liked the little snapshots of different reactions: the ones who don't care, and the man who sheds a tear for her, they were all very well done and mysterious. There were a few typos, but nothing serious.

All in all, a very good job. I think you could have taken the story a tiny bit further in the future, without revealing what happened, but maybe concluded with someone who does know her recognizing her, or someone identifying the body? But having it conclude where her body is picked up definitely gives some closure, so I can see why you chose that.

great job!!!

Author's Response: Thank You so much!

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