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Review:Huffleherbs says:
This was really strange to read, just because of the narrative that I've never actually read before. That being said, I like strange. There are a few grammar issues you might want to get a beta to look at, and you need to distinguish more thoroughly between your paragraphs.

I love the jumpy narrative between three defining moments in Lily's life, although I don't like how callous Snape is in the end: mostly because it seems slightly uncanon.

For your first attempt at writing like this, it's gone really well! I couldn't imagine writing a story in second person, but for one-shots you've proved it can be done well :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for getting this done so quickly!!!

And I'm currently posting a beta wanted form, so hopefully those grammar issues will disappear soon.

I think there's also some formatting issues, my laptop doesn't really like submitting docs on hpff so I'll fix that too.

And Snape's character seemed odd to me, I think I just got lazy and let it pass :P That will also (hopefully) be helped by a beta.

Thank you so much! I was very, very afraid when posting this since its in second I'm glad you like it (even if it is strange :P)

- Julia

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