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Review:Princess of Paris says:
Haha. I loved how all three POVs ended with the same line: It would just take time, and a little bit of luck. So cute!

It was an awesome story and everything, but I think you could expand more on it. Like, the scenes you chose were alright, but it didn't really capture the essence. They were too similar, and while that could be a theme, it sounds just like the same scene with different people in it. Maybe that was what you wanted, but I think you would need at least a chapter for each POV, if you plan to edit it, because the characters aren't really developed. I think the best way to improve this would be to make it a short story collection.

Anyway, I really liked it!

Author's Response: Hiya! Thanks so much for the review! I'm really glad you liked it!

Good points! I should explain more that my stories are all internally consistent - the James Sirius you hear about here is the same James in "You're Not Sorry", Harry is the same Harry in "Trains..." "Nepotism" and "The Brightening Glance". Because of this they are all kind of snapshots of the big story. So, in that way, they are all eachothers sequels, and more are in the way.

That isnt really answering you is it? Basically, yes, the characters arent fully developed here - but everything i write fits into a kind of short story collection, so theres bits of them everywhere, if you have the patience to read anymore.

That is what I wanted, I chose to make them similar in ways and different in others. But I get what you mean! :)

Thanks again!

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