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Review:RedJulyet says:
I really like how you described Lily and Severus' relationship. How she was blind to what his true intentions were, how she kind-of sort-of forgave him but was still angry, and how she was still loyal to him (or at least to who he used to be, I guess) when she wore her lily necklace.

I personally thought the middle part of "Lily Potter, 3 August 1979" jumped ahead too far. It would have been nice to read about what became of Lily and Severus and Lily and Potter. But it was really powerful when you said that the reason Lily had fallen for Potter was that she had stopped running from him---whereas in contrast, things hadn't worked out with Severus because (i assume) she was still running from him (like when he tried to kiss her. Eek! Poor Sev!)

This was really great, loved it!! keep writing!

Author's Response: thank you so much for the review!!!

I'll think about adding some more in.I did actually consider it when I was writing it, I guess I was just lazy and decided to skip :P I was contemplating putting in her first date with James, maybe graduation and possibly James' proposal.so we'll see.

And your assessment of why things didn't work out with Sev is exactly right. With James, Lily learnt to stop running. With Sev, she never used to run from him but then started to.

Yeah.

Anyway.massive thanks for the review!!! I'm glad you liked it :)


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