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Review:DemetersChild says:
Aww, this was cute. It's always fun to see an April Fools' joke and it's especially nice that it came from the next generation. I'm glad that the George you wrote wasn't still moping over Fred's death. I see it in a lot of fics that he practically goes through life dead himself, but I never saw him as the kind of person to do that, so I'm glad he didn't in your story.

I think the beginning planning was a bit long. Maybe it could be cut off after they acquire Rose's help and Albus asks about the fireworks. I don't think the rest of it is necessary and just makes it run a little long.

There was another place where the end of a sentence was cut off: "One Ravenclaw fifth year had a pair of bunny ears growing out of his head and a little first year had..." A little first year had what!? Haha, the suspense is killing me. :P

It was funny and I enjoyed reading it. :D

Dem

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reviewing :)

I've already written one fic where George was devastated over losing Fred but that was set a few months after his death. So this time, I decided that he'd not be acting like that. After all, it's set many years after Fred's death.

Thanks for the criticism. When I edit this story, I will take that into account. :)

I'm glad you noticed that mistake. I've now edited it and it's back in the queue! For your info, it now says 'a little first year was wearing a Muggle joker's hat.'

Thanks again! :D

-Sophia x


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